Talk:The Forward Observer (Fanfic created by EdAWACSdenyY)/@comment-32.60.67.169-20131229191823

Your story progression is sloppy and there are some careless grammatical errors. Wow. Anyways I like the way you gave personality to the story rather than just make people feel like their playing a game cause that's just pointless in my opinion to read. The story has many faults in it and some of the characters seem stocked. Yet you've done a masterful job in describtion and bringing the storyline alive. Reading your fanfic I found myself transported into the scene and personally exprience it as if this was reality. That I must congraluate you. Your masterful ability to transport readers into the scene and allow them to expreicence the moment step-by step that is a rare gift.

Keep writing EdAWACS I have a feeling there is great potential in your following literary works